The Key by Zack
SUCCESS CRITERIA
- Beginning, middle and end
- Simple, compound and complex sentences
- Choosing the best possible words
- Lots of rich details
- Punctuating sentences (CAPITAL letters in the right place, full stops... )
- Paragraphs
- Use your planning and revising learning muscles
Once upon a time I was walking along the beach by myself and I saw something shimmering in the distance so I ran and ran but I never found anything. Suddenly a brit gold key shimmered rit in front of my eyes I thort I should pick it up but what if it was a trap well I didn't' fall for it. So I ran home thinking about what that key led to, was it a cave or maybe a underground bunker I don't know what it led to?
Later that night I could not sleep because I could not stop thinking about the key. I jumped out of my bed then I slipped my slippers on and I quietly sneaked out my bedroom door and rushed down the stairs grabbed my dressing gown on and snuck out the door.
Then I walked down the to the beach and found the key. I picked it up and ran as far away as possible. I sat down on a nearby rock steering down at the sparkling key. And I let out a long si. What should I do with it but then I noticed something on the key. It was a little dusty so I blow the dust of and there was a pirate symbol on it.
I walked home and on the way I found a shortcut so I went down the track and I tripped over a root in the ground.
And fell of a cliff and I got knocked out.
I la on the ground still as the ground and till I finally woke up and I was sitting on something it was a key howl I thought to myself could it be.
